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leap跳跃,飞跃
apart from 除…之外
五、论据积累:
对于表格中的信息,我们要具体情况,具体分析。
要先有个总述,说明表格的主要内容。
然后再进行对比分析,数据相似的,或是变化明显的。
六、结构分析:
本文只有两段,并没有开头一段引出表格简要信息。我们可以加上引导语:
The chart shows the average number of miles travelled per person per year in England from 1985 to 2000.
第一段:
在描述变化趋势方面,应该有一句话总述总量上的变化,指每人每年出行总里数的增加:On average, the miles travelled per person per year increased from 4740 miles in 1985 to 6475 miles in 2000. 再接着描述其他方面的变化。
而且表格中的数据被理解错误,数据应为每人每年旅行的里程数而不是人数,比如:In 2000 the most preferred mode of travel is by car with 4806 people.中people应为miles。
is:时态运用错误,应该为was,因为是2000年,过去的时态
接下来,把bus的两种不同情况进行对比:There's a noticeable decrease in public transportation locally where it dropped from 429 people in 1985 to 274 people in 2000. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years.
noticeable 显而易见的
where引导定语从句
However the long distance bus rides is ....本句主语应为the long distance bus ride
preferred 偏爱的
its指示代词指代上一句话中的the long distance bus rides
its figures are more than doubled:are 去掉,double可用作不及物动词,用主动语态
然后把Walking与Bicycle进行对比,并指出步行或是自行车出行的减少却增加了火车交通方式的使用:People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000 which probably made people to take the train more often. There’s a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. This (指示代词指代上一句话中)makes the train second popular mode of transportation. The biggest leap in the chart is the increase of taxi users who are tripled in 2000 with 42 people, where it was only 13 in 1985.
People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased....: are 去掉,decrease可用作不及物动词,用主动语态
There’s a significant increase in the numbers:numbers应为number
It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 :it指示代词指代上一句话中the numbers of people who travelled by train
are tripled:are 去掉,triple可用作不及物动词,用主动语态
第二段:
第二段指出除了以上这些交通方式以外,当然还有别的出行方式,也就是表格中Others的情况:Apart from (除…之外)all this modes of travel, there are some more different types of travel as well of course. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000.
is rapidly increased:are 去掉,increase可用作不及物动词,用主动语态
此外,文章结尾处也没有做简单的叙述。
参考译文:
2000年最受欢迎的交通方式是坐小汽车,有4806人。使用当地公共交通的人数有明显的下降,从1895 年的429人减少到2000年的274人。但乘坐长途公共汽车旅行更受人们欢迎,在过去15年里人数增长了一倍多。2000年选择步行或骑自行车的人数稍有下降,使得人们更多地乘坐火车:从1985年的289人增加到2000 年的366人。这使得火车成为第二受欢迎的交通工具。表中增长最大的是乘坐出租车的人数,从1985年的13 人增长到2000的42人,几乎是以前的三倍。
除了这些交通方式以外,当然还有别的出行方式。选择别的交通方式出行的人数从450人迅速增加到 2000年的585人。
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